Writing as a Process · B4 English Language

Lesson notes

Learning Objectives

Indicator: B4.4.9.3.1 - Review and revise the one-paragraph draft taking out irrelevant details

By the end of the lesson, learners can:

Read their one-paragraph draft aloud slowly and critically to identify sentences that do not belong.
Answer the four revision guide questions (topic interest, beginning, clarity, relevance) about their own draft.
Cross out or remove irrelevant details from a draft paragraph while keeping the main idea intact.
Write a revised version of their paragraph that contains only sentences related to the topic.
Explain in their own words why removing irrelevant details improves a piece of writing.

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Curriculum details

Strand: Writing (Strand 4)
Sub-strand: Writing as a Process (4.9)
Content standard: B4.4.9.3 - Apply strategies for improving drafts for publishing
Indicator: B4.4.9.3.1 - Review and revise the one-paragraph draft taking out irrelevant details
Suggested placement: Term 3, Week 4 (Week 28 of the year)
Our suggestion, laid out in curriculum order across three terms of twelve weeks. NaCCA does not fix the week, so follow your school's scheme of learning.
Curriculum reference: English Language Curriculum (Basic 4-6), 2019, p. 51
Transcribed from the official NaCCA publication. Check this page against the source.

Exemplars (from the NaCCA curriculum)

- Have pupils revise their first draft. Ask them to set aside their first draft for a while and return to it to read over slowly and critically, and reread it several times.
- Have learners use these questions as a revision guide: i. Is my topic interesting? ii. Does the beginning catch the reader's attention? iii. Are the ideas easy to understand? iv. Do all the sentences say something about the topic?
- Encourage learners to make as many changes as necessary to improve their work.